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Release Information

Visual Quality

Script Quality

Results

 

Release Information

Episode details.

Release format: MKV (360 MB, 10-bit)

Japanesiness: No honorifics on the default track. On the alternate track, honorifics are included when Underwater can be assed to remember.

English style: American English.

Encoding details: http://pastebin.com/ysF9Lvt0

Speed: Quick (<48 hours)

Translation style: Original TL.

 

External links.

Group website: http://underwater.nyaatorrents.org/

IRC channel: #[email protected]

 

 

Visual Review

Karaoke.

Opening. The color choice was generally sensible, but the cuts didn’t make much sense for the section pictured in the second screen.

Rating: Good.

Ending. Solid color choices. The bulk of the ED’s script color was based on who was singing each line, though I’m not quite sure of the logic behind, say, Mashiro’s.

Rating: Good.

 

 

Typesetting.

Everything was hit. Thumbs up.

Oh, suppose I should mention that title capitalization wasn’t standardized. Not that it matters terribly much.

 

 

 

Script Review

Karaoke.

There’s way too much in this line. If this revolution is “within her”, you can consider the “secret” part to be implied. So drop the “secret” bit here and the line will be cleaner.

“And sparks an emotional revolution within me” <- Fix’d.

Though I would rather see “And sparks a revolution of emotions within me”, cuz I like good writing.

 

 

Main Script.

Hey, did anyone else watch… you know, the gg subs for the Madoka where they put in the commercials? Haha, those were the good times, weren’t they, guys? lol memes, you know. lol.

*my studies

Look, editor-kun, if you’re gonna play around with an idiom, you need to understand what you’re dealing with. When you say “All’s fair in love and trade” you need to know what “All’s fair in love and war” means. “All’s fair when it comes to trade” isn’t a sentiment that fits the original idiom, unless you happen to be the hyper-Libertarian brand of Republican. So don’t fucking use it.

“I think it’s quite a fair trade.”

It’s not like taking baths together is unheard of, though.
>That’s right.
Nor is going shopping for clothes and underwear together.
>That’s right.
Sister {\i1}does{\i0} pick out my underwear for me, though.
>That’s right!

The first two lines work, but the third is completely off. “That’s right!” isn’t even close to an acceptable response, considering the girl is supposed to be cluelessly agreeable, not hopelessly retarded.

No, they run a confectionery company. Fuck, you call it a company not even six seconds later. Get it together.

“You’re overthinking this.”

No, the common-language phrasal is “disposed of”.

Is this a word scramble puzzle or something? Looks unsolvable to me as-is.

“Kobeni made some chocolate for you yesterday that she was planning on giving you today.”

Is Mokrele-mbembe his evolved form or something?

Match your fucking typesets.

 

 

 

Results

Watchability: Watchable.

Visual grade: A

Script grade: B-

Overall grade: B

All in all, this was much better than t.3.3.d’s, and faster too. Easy choice to make.

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