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Visual Quality

Script Quality

Results

Release Information

Episode details.

Release format: MKV (303 MB, 10-bit), LQ MKV (210 MB, 8-bit)

Japanesiness: Honorifics. “Onii-san” used. “youma” used.

English style: British English.

Encoding details: http://pastebin.com/TfCZDypE

Speed: Slow (>48 hours)

Translation style: Original TL.

External links.

Group website: http://doki.co/

IRC channel: #[email protected]

Visual Review

Karaoke.

Webm link

Opening. They didn’t do anything special here, but I thought the KFX was nice enough.

Rating: Okay+.

Webm link

Ending. Sufficiently sufficient.

Rating: Okay.

Typesetting.

It’s not amazing typesetting, but it did its job. Sorta like a middle manager who just can’t be fucked to do anything other than coast along till his liver finally fails him during one of his weekly trips to the brothels in the bad part of town.

Sorta.

Spoiler for

Script Review

Karaoke.

You mean “or”, not “and”. Cuz the way it’s written, it means they’re not gonna throw away “destiny” for the “will to fight for themselves”. This isn’t every other anime ever, guys. Come on.

How the fuck are they going to “put on the starry sky”, Doki? I’m sure not even your fans are stupid enough to think that makes sense.

Why is there, a comma there?

Main Script.

The Syndicate is up to their old tricks again, making honorifics more uncomfortable to read than a list of your sister’s sexual partners.

Holy fuck. If this sentence was a human, it wouldn’t be able to leave the house. Put it out of its misery, Doki, and try again.

…where the fuck is that second line trailing from? It’s not part of the prior sentence.

This is too much, Doki.

Can you taste the generic translation? It’s like chalk and sweaty balls.

In case you’re wondering, the vast majority of the dialogue in this release is as stilted and unnatural as this.

would -> will

“The key is in you girls.” -> certainty

“the warriors’ memories may return” -> uncertainty

“the princess’s seal will be broken” -> certainty

“we might learn the location of the Legendary Silvery Crystal” -> uncertainty

The only thing I was sure of after this roller coaster is that this release is awful.

Yes, they are the Four Heavenly Kings, but she’s addressing them. This’d be like a CEO addressing his assistant by saying “The assistant, come here and help me hide the body of this dead child prostitute.”

Just doesn’t sound good.

That’s not very reassuring.

“You can catch it on the news later.”

“Is it okay for us to come?”

This doesn’t say anything. Like, at all.

Ehm, no.

“My body feels warm for some reason.”

Although you clearly believe differently, Usagi ain’t a scientist. She’s not wondering how it feels warm, she’s wondering why.

Makes it seem like the Youma’s name is Youma. Which I don’t think it is. Then again, I could be giving Japan too much credit.

my -> our

doesn’t -> didn’t

She knows it works based on her experience last episode, it’s just not working against this youma.

She fucking said “pace” in English. I’d suggest trying “at your own pace”, but I think that’s gonna be a bit too slow.

The sweet lip is what?

Timing.

Apparently no one in the Syndicate knows how to time.

Before you start coming up with reasons this could be my fault, they seriously only allocated half a second to a 20-syllable line.

Dialogue: 0,0:07:28.72,0:07:29.27,Default,♂,0,0,0,,I think it would be better if you didn’t. I have a bad feeling about it.

But they did put in the Sailor Scouts’ symbols in the Aegisub Actor field, so I almost forgive them for it.

Dark_Sage Says

Watchability: Watchable.

Visual grade: B

Script grade: D-

Overall grade: D-

Another misfire from the Syndicate. Will the Cartel ever be defeated at this rate? Maybe, if Syndicate leader Chihiro has anything to say about it!

Tune in next time to Crymore for “Syndicate vs. Cartel, Episode III: Chihiro-chan is a cute girl worthy of your downloads, trust him”.

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8 thoughts on “Fansub Review: [Doki] Sailor Moon Crystal (Episode 04)”

Xythar

September 13, 2014 at 10:56 pm

“my pace” is a pretty common Japanese loanphrase. I’d say it’s more about not really paying attention to the people around you – it doesn’t necessarily have to be about the speed at which you do things.
- Dark_Sage
  
  September 13, 2014 at 11:18 pm
  
  I was saying that Doki should use a variant of the “pace” idiom for that line but that they might be too slow to manage it correctly. Perhaps it didn’t come across too great, though. I ended up rushing through this Doki review cuz I placed the arbitrary “every 30 minutes a new review” time limit on myself and forgot how many lines they actually ruined.
tenkenX6

September 19, 2014 at 7:19 am

>Why would they meed to?

>Are we fine too?

Kind of sounds/looks like something you get from Google Translate or something similar. Sounds way too stiff and awkward. >_>;
Psi_Kiya_Trist

September 27, 2014 at 12:36 am

Re: timing.

That happened because Editor-kun thinks that he doesn’t have to be on when Timer-chan has the time to work on it on the Saturday it airs making it go TL into Timing into editing etc… And thus Editor-kun broke the timing on that line. Despite the numerous times Timer-chan has explicitly told Editor-kun that he needs to edit first.(nevermind that it airs at 1 pm Editor-kun’s time, and 5 am Timer-chan’s time, and Timer-chan has almost always been there on time to work on it shortly after it airs, while editor-kun seems to think being there is “not important”.)

Also, DAMN STRAIGHT I PUT THE SAILOR SCOUTS SYMBOLS IN THE ACTOR FIELDS. That’s like FANGIRLISMS ALL OVER THE SCRIPT, and necessary for me to feel satisfied with working on it. Which I no longer do thanks to Editor-kun, but that’s a different story.
- Hairy
  
  September 27, 2014 at 7:54 am
  
  I don’t understand. Why can’t he edit a timed script? I don’t see why that would be a problem. Surely editing doesn’t break timing. Unless he like split a line without fixing the timing up, which would be pretty retarded.
  
  And if timing does get broken somewhere, or if there’s just a mistake made by the timer, isn’t that what QC is for?
- fnord
  
  September 27, 2014 at 9:56 am
  
  How is it remotely possible to break the timing during editing?
  - ItsHim
    
    September 27, 2014 at 12:16 pm
    
    Maybe they press Ctrl+3 instead of Ctrl+2 and their QC is asleep at the wheel.
  - Psi_Kiya_Trist
    
    September 27, 2014 at 12:22 pm
    
    I’m not entirely sure either, and I may have misremembered during my rant due to circumstances surrounding Editor-kun. But my Script has the timing on that line(119 on my script), go from 7:24.67 to 7:28.88. So it wasn’t a Timer derp.

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